Fantastic Writing in Room Ten Today

This is the first draft of Poppy's writing using the 'recipe' from James K Baxter's poem. She worked hard to create her own ideas and really bring that moment into the reader's mind. Jackson also helped with ideas and by discussing.....this led to a fantastic edit. I am so proud of Poppy's growing writing skills. What do you think?

 

 

Mrs Cameron’s farewell was usual enough; It had a big lot of people smiling, children watching the pinky glittery costumes shining over to the back of the adince. A dance I never did. My heart was pounding when it was my tern to be in the front. But I was nervous. I had a  blast of a time. But to Be onist I can not pictcher mrs Cameron in a polka dot abiceny.

Doing nothing important.

 

Mrs Cameron’s farewell was usual enough; It had a lot of people smiling, children watching, pinky, glittery costumes shining over  the back of the audience, and a dance I had never done before. A  kind-hearted   speech that I didn’t have to attempt. Heart pounding, my turn in the front, nervous. Mrs Cameron’s joy-filled-happy-tears racing cross-country down her face.

Doing nothing important at all.

 Poppy Johnson