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 Blossoming Spectacular

The king proteas head feels as soft as fluffy fleecy wool.Its head has a massive bowl shape with bunch mixtures of colours spread right through it. The incense fragrance smells like a bar of slightly soap scented which has been smothered tinted right through the blossoming flower. The stem looks as thick compact and strong as a metal bar, clutching the hefty bloom, with crimson edged petals surrounding the soft pink inside, Crimson edged Petals with a soft pink inside, Clusters of paddle blade-shaped petals shimmer glisten brightly, The black spotted dotted lime green leaves burst erupt explode with with colour, The king protea It has a tint trace of green amongst the pink infested petals, The rusty eroded looking cup shaped vase holds embraces three glimmering, coloured stained flowers.


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Blossoming Spectacular

The King Protea’s head feels as soft as fleecy wool.
 It’s head has a massive bowl shape with mixtures of colours spread right through it. 
The fragrance smells slightly soap scented, tinted through the blossoming flower.
 The stem looks as compact and strong as a metal bar, clutching the hefty bloom, with crimson edged petals surrounding the soft pink inside, Clusters of blade-shaped petals glisten brightly and black-dotted lime green flowers explode with colour.
 It has a trace of green amongst the pink infested petals.
 The eroded cup shaped vase embraces three glimmering, stained flowers.